Good Imagery
I like the general ideas in this track. There were some parts and sounds that could be switched (or removed) in my opinion up a little but for most the composition suits the mood you're going for real well ^_^
=The Good=
-Really interesting pads you start with, like the progression
-Key melodies go along really with the track, I like when you harmonize the keys
-Beat works decent
-Basslines rolls pretty smoothly
-The general themes are pretty entertaining
-There's enough variations in here to be suffice for a 7+ minute song without becoming repetive
-Good Sytrus preset choices: the pad, bellls, and the piano thing you used in the start. They all work well with themes.
=The Bad=
- Levels and panning- experiment in the mixer by making certain parts louder, and quieter, try panning the instrument more to left, some subtle EQ changes wouldn't hurt, like putting a touch of more bass on the bass guitar
- Put some reverb on the piano for depth
- Some of the synths sound too generic, don't be afraid to start messing with the wave shape, or juicing it up with a thicker chorus effect.
-you really need some more realistic drum samples for this track-stock FL samples dont gel to well in here
-beat could be changed up more in certain parts, try using less kicks in some parts and more snares
- There's some unecessary dissonance in here, because the general themes are tonal and soft it doesn't really call for any of that. The phrase at 1:48 is were the dissonance occurs, specifically at 1:49 and 1:56...try fixing those chords. I atleast think you should ^_^
-Presets I didn't like: Just really the FL slayer. A guitar would work well in here, I just don't like the sound of the one you have here...try browsing through the presets more or messing with the effects. I wish I could say more but I've never used FL slayer ^_^
-There's some minor clipping in parts (when the volume meter reaches the red), try experimenting with soft clippers/compressors
-Hmmm...not really jazz, I thought it falls more under pop or ambient :]
I like this track! I would just recommend experimening more with the mixing and sound development aspects. You've already got a bunch of tracks and the talent to make a pretty nice composition, so why not move a step forth? :) Good luck!